Black Ghost

This thing is dripping in awesomeness. No, I mean I really, really liked it. Original, thought-provoking, emotional, all that good stuff. I don't have much to correct, as everyone above ...

Hey Suzanne! :P Well, here's the story. Thanks so much in advance for taking a read. ^_^

7/10 It's nice ^_^ [s] BlackGhost [/s]

Is the young man a street magician that she just happened to catch in the middle of his act That one ^_^. You see, I wrote this for a reflection ...

"I'm afraid there's nothing more we can do for you." "What do you mean?" Dr. Carmen took off his glasses and slowly massaged his eyes. He sighed deeply as he ...

Hey again. I don't have much to say about this next part, other than it's good as usual. :) I couldn't find anything significantly wrong with it. I liked the ...

Hey Kylan! Another great installment. I love your dialogue, it's very snappy and realistic at the same time. It flows well, and the conversation seems very natural. Your description is ...

I liked it at the beginning, it sounded as if you were going to start a good discussion about something insightful. Though, at the end, it seemed as if you ...

Um...where's the conflict? Honestly, there's nothing happening. Really, ask yourself, does a girl waking up, contemplating a few things, and then leaving her bedroom make for a good read? I ...

Ok, first off, you're a very good writer. You have so much emotion and description flowing through this that it's like being drenched in some decadent chocolate. Second, I couldn't ...

Hi! I thought this was really cool! You had very flowing and lush description throughout the whole thing, although it never felt as if you were trying to hard. I ...

Hi! Interesting piece, though I'm not sure the emotions came across as best as you though they could. I stand between the thin string that divides life and death This ...

Hey Kylan! I really liked this, interesting new story your brewing here. I couldn't really find anything wrong with it, though I thought this part seemed a little odd. A ...

I don't have much to add besides what the others have said. Good story. :) I actually found myself really engaged in the pencil's narration, and I really loved how ...

O.O Sorry about that...where's my head? You're probably right, I just need to take a breather or something. They're only tests, right? *runs off to do something non-stressful*